The thursday post critiques 11.7.13

PIC BLANK 4 BUKLYT gatj

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this week’s flash fiction for you guys, feel free to say what’s in your heart:

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He planned it perfectly, that is what he thought! It was a marriage of convenience, she wanted to paint the money she has earned as escort with white colour, he wanted to get rich quickly.

They had everything in joint ownership, and as it is normal, he was her nominee.

He had her murdered by contract killers, made it look like murder for lust and profit. He played his part well… real well….but the inspector smelled rotten rats when he got married within three years.

his tear stained eyes and frequent fainting in police station started to sound a well played role from some cheap theater….

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6 thoughts on “The thursday post critiques 11.7.13

  1. I like this story, although the man in it is pretty evil, to be sure. The only point I would make, very minor, is that I think it would be better without an exclamation mark at the end. Generally, it’s not good to use exclamation marks except in dialogue where someone is shouting. That might be a personal preference, but for me, it lessens the effect of the ending.

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